Worst Sentence of the Month!

Wow! Jaw-droppingly horrible.

A drama based on the elite crew of firemen from Prescott, Arizona who battled a wildfire in Yarnell, AZ Iin June 2013 that claimed the lives of 19 of their members.

  1. Crew is a singular noun, so you can’t say “their” members.
  2. Comma after “Arizona.”
  3. Kinda awkward with that second “AZ,” which should be spelled out, and needs a comma when it is.
  4. Misspelling: Iin…
  5. “Their” should be “its.”

Here we go, with editorial suggestions in addition to punctuation/grammar corrections:

A drama based on the elite crew of firemen from Prescott, Arizona, who battled a wildfire in nearby Yarnell in June of 2013 that claimed the lives of 19 of its members.

I kind of like “an elite crew,” rather than “the” elite crew, but, hey, who’s nitpicky? Not moi!